This Any Good?

theycallmeoj

Active Member
So my friend sends me this poem and asks if i think it's any good. I'm really not the one to judge but perhaps some of you might give me some opinions on it. So this is what she sent to me:

I was reading the other day

Poems in the unassuming sense

Comfortable words that whistled in my head

the way a happy man whistles when he walks

Contented to the post office

running errands: milk, and a loaf of bread,

a roll of stamps and pipe tobacco.



I wish I could write that way

Everyday, not ordinary but

at peace

Making observations over a cup of coffee,

under a cloud of cherry tobacco.



My words are the call of a crow on the asphalt


I wonder if the sound hurts as much to make

as it does to hear

Does the crow agonize over every syllable

Every breath that is not noise

Weighing the difference

Until the pain of silence is judged

Worse than the scratchy ripped caw



That's how it is for me

In the parking lot, scavenging

I hold my pen still

Until

The silence is unbearable

and I must speak, though I know

They will see what I am then

Glossy black feathers

Bright eyes

Desolate voice

Is this any good? I told her i thought it was good, but honestly i was trying to be nice. I couldn't tell you if it was good or not. Poetry isn't really my thing.

Thanks for all the replys.
 

123Michaelc

Active Member
Very good, I like how he compares his own writing style to that of others.... tell him to keep up with writing....
 
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