The Boy Who Cried

Dante wakes up to get ready for school. He puts on a white tee shirt, black Dickie pants, and gray converses. He goes to the bathroom to wash his face and brush his teeth. He says bye to his mom, grabs his back pack, and walks out the door. When he knows that his mom is too far to see him do it, he takes a cigarette out of his shoe, lights it, and continues walking to his bus stop. Dante arrives at his destination where he waits alone on the chilly dark September morning. He flicks his cigarette when he can see the school bus approaching in the morning's horizon. The bus driver didn't make it in time to save his life, as a car pulls up and shoots him seven times in the torso at point blank range. He hit's the ground struggling for air and flailing his arms around. Dante stops moving because he sees a light at the end of a dark tunnel and wonders what's there. His eyes roll into the back of his head then he swallows his tongue. Dante has blacked out and lost all conciseness now. The paramedics arrive promptly 30 minutes later. They find Dante with his mouth still slightly open on the sidewalk. It took both the ambulance and police longer to respond to Dante's death than it took for the tears on Dante's face to dry.

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Ok so I read about 2 pages, and truth told, it sucks. It sounded like an anti-pot commercial. It was poorly written with little detail. What little substance it had being about some apparently innocent kids death, is lost when it flashes to a full year earlier and the kid is just smoking some herb. My guess is it ends with him being "addicted" to marijuana and getting into debt with some really hard core pot dealers, blah bla balh. Write about what you know about try writing about yourslef. That is easy once you master yourself it will be easy to write good shit about others. peace.

I don't think this story will got me interested on reading it and it is so long.

echlectica said:

Ok so I read about 2 pages, and truth told, it sucks. It sounded like an anti-pot commercial. It was poorly written with little detail. What little substance it had being about some apparently innocent kids death, is lost when it flashes to a full year earlier and the kid is just smoking some herb. My guess is it ends with him being "addicted" to marijuana and getting into debt with some really hard core pot dealers, blah bla balh. Write about what you know about try writing about yourslef. That is easy once you master yourself it will be easy to write good shit about others. peace.

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Your prediction is completely wrong. Maybe its your attention span that sucks? Regaurdless I will take what you said into consideration.

i really liked the story bro ! its too true aswell .... shame he realized too late !