First Time I've Ever Done This.

I'll take any sort of criticism for this

Chuck

I throw up, and it feels good
I throw up, all my food
I throw up, day night
I throw up, out of sight

I puked all over the place
I've got barf on my face

I throw up, when I'm in school
I throw up, when I see my stool
I throw up, and it makes me thin
I throw up, just wait a minute...

I just puked all over the place
I blew chunks right on your face

Im only gunna say I completely hate it because it has to do with whack topics

As far as your skill i cant do anybetter. I dont do poetry im no good wit that

Now you just need some strangely-drawn pictures in rainbow colours and you can publish a children's book...
"I Throw Up, I Blow Chunks" by Dr. Hoppeuss...

Wtf?????????

skippy pb said:

Im only gunna say I completely hate it because it has to do with whack topics

As far as your skill i cant do anybetter. I dont do poetry im no good wit that

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I really hate throwing up too. I can't stand it one bit. if someone coughs the wring way around me or something, I'll freak out. this is probablt the first and last time I'll ever write a "poem" though because I really don't have that kind of skill.

Hey hoppus

your work has not been done in vein lol

I laughed

Baz said:

Hey hoppus

your work has not been done in vein lol

I laughed

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lol thanks baz

be a good death metal song.

nice poem lol it craked me up

HHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAHAAAAAAAAhhhaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

dude this poem is actually pretty fire.

it would be good as a 8 second punk blast song.

madcowpatty said:

HHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAHAAAAAAAAhhhaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

dude this poem is actually pretty fire.

it would be good as a 8 second punk blast song.

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that's what I was thinking as I wrote it man. I'm gonna see if my bans wants to do it up hahaha.

HoppusTheCaveman said:

I really hate throwing up too. I can't stand it one bit. if someone coughs the wring way around me or something, I'll freak out. this is probablt the first and last time I'll ever write a "poem" though because I really don't have that kind of skill.

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what do you think your going to be some kind of fucking edgar allen poe over night? practice for awhile if you dont get any better throw your notebook away

potheadsmoker said:

what do you think your going to be some kind of fucking edgar allen poe over night? practice for awhile if you dont get any better throw your notebook away

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well don't get me wrong, I have all sorts of lil' rhymes in my head and stuff like that. little sayings and poems, but I really don't write them down or anything.

well get on it, you say your in a band? if you ever want to get anywhere carry a fucking notebook around...as soon as that thought comes to mind you might be able to go into an artistic mind set and just keep the shit flowing rather than getting distracted by normal everyday shit...i use to write a lot of shit on my computer before...now its all gone, not that it was useful material or anything, just good to have something like that around then you can look back get ideas from things see what kind of mood you were in when you wrote what kind of drugs you were on etc

i know this isnt like standing in front of a crowd but you got balls for presenting something that you created

potheadsmoker said:

i know this isnt like standing in front of a crowd but you got balls for presenting something that you created

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yeah I suppose. I kinda use this place as a guinea pig sometimes to see if it's well enough recieved.

stfu now....