Can anyone help a stoner with his cover letter :)

brandon.

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Stoners might not be the best proof readers haha. I'm exhausted so I would miss any issues, sorry about that.

A trick I use is reading it outloud to yourself a few times. Force yourself to read the words and not let your brain say what you think it was *suppose* to say (if that makes sense...)
 

Vices

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Good idea man! Never though of that, I remember being taught that back in highschool.
cheers !
 

Vices

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Okay thanks.. I should reword or rewrite itÉ do you mean I focus on the benefits of myself and not the companyÉ
What is a good substitute for I
 

NLXSK1

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Okay thanks.. I should reword or rewrite itÉ do you mean I focus on the benefits of myself and not the companyÉ
What is a good substitute for I
If you require any further information or to set up a time that we could discuss further why I am confident that I would be an asset to your team, I can be reached at ---- or by email at ---- .
If you require any further information or to set up a time we could discuss further how I could be an asset to your team you can reach me by phone or e-mail at...
 
Hey all!
Yeah so i just did a quick resume up really baked; and was wondering if anyone could proof-read it for me. I am canadian so my spelling might be a little off! I would really appreciate it!

The one thread that invites grammar nazi`s!!

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I have taken notice to your company and I am seeking full time and long-term employment. I have attached my resume for your review and consideration and you will find that my qualifications and future goalswill surpass your requirements and expectations. I think with my experience and qualifications I would be best suited for _______ department inside your Corporation, COmpany, Office..whatever
I am a very results driven individual and would conduct myself in such a manner.


As shown on my resume, I am presently employed with ---- as a Shift Manager. My duties involve time and person(s) management, closing paperwork, handling issues and complaints, balancing of days income, working alone over extended hours and assisting the general manager in introducing new ideas to the staff. I believe fast-food service and grocery are similar in key areas such as operating efficiently, working towards loss prevention and customer satisfaction. Therefor the transition would be a lot faster and easier than normal due to my experience. I was promoted to Shift Manager within the first 3 months of joining ---- and I believe this shows that I am a dedicated and a hard worker. I feel though I have come to the end of my educational days at _____ and have learned as much as they can provide and therefore I am ready to move forward to my goals of becoming a better and mroe valued employee. . I also have exceptional data input skills and experience with PLU based cash register systems so I know the hardware infrastructure and will be a very compatible transfer.
I understand that with companies in the customer service industry that it is necessary to always be punctual, efficient and pleasant as the customer relationship is a companies most valuable asset and these are all qualities that I exercise everyday both in my personal life as well as professional. My contact details are listed below (both phone and email) if I can provide more insight as to why I am a perfect fit for ______ company.

Thank you for your time and consideration in reviewing my application.


and I smoke a lot of weed
i am pretty baked but it works for my students that are in the 7th grade so it should work for a Canadian ;-)
 

mrheadie

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vices,
when i read a resume on a possible new hire, i'm looking for something to jump out at me in the first 2-3 sentences which you start to do with "I am a very dedicated employee" but i never wanna see the second half of that sentence "that will always behave in a professional manner". when an employer see a sentence like that, they might assume that at on time you didn't act in the manner stated, simply because you did state it. sounds crazy i know. i still hire on "physical" interviews rather than trusting what someone wrote on a piece of paper, but some people will always use a resume and education over actuall apperence and attitude. i feel i can better judge someones qualities and personal mannerisms in an actuall conversation not only about the job at hand, but life situations as well. instead of finishing the sentence i mentioned with "will always behave in a....." try, "i am a very dedicated employee that is eager to learn and better myself". also, check out some sample resume and cover letters to get a better idea of what employers are looking for in todays market. and like brandon mentioned, read aloud to yourself a few times and try to breakdown anything you think might be questionable. good luck my friend.
 

Vices

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I got a job today!!! Full-time with benfits, dream job!
I cannot thank you guys enough!!
 
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