What do you guys think of this rap I WROTE

Hey guys, I was messing around earlier making some beats on my Maschine 2 and writing Raps. I had the idea to write one that is an order at Mc Donalds because I want to suprise my friends when i go with them by using the rap. Here is what I got, let me know what you think


Let me get two bigmacs
and two apple pies
a little bit of sprite and a side of fries
Let me get a McDouble
Let me get a McChicken
Hot sauce... make sure that shit kickin
I wanna Mc rib, before i McPiss
Let me get a hashbrown
and if it isnt lunch yet
and if it is,
imma be sad and upset

let me get some nuggest too

I wanna bar cake
and a parfait
two of them, ive had a really hard day
Let me get a McCafe Latte
and a couple hundred lost shamrock shakes
Poweraid, high C
Ranch snack wrap on the side please
Let me get a burger with a slice of cheese
but no onions or pickles so hold that please
I want a McFlurry
two of those
One M&M and one Oreo

I want everything on the dollar menu,
and a burger with... jalepenos
Let me get a snack wrap for my bad bap
but im not sad
\better not add no sauce no afla
Takin everything to go so pack that in a black bag hi resing on the flap jack

did you get all that

Nice one, did you made yourself or took help from any of your friend?

That's a long ass order Bro. Hope you actually plan on paying for all that. Otherwise you'll just end up looking like a dick.

Also, do you actually think they're gonna sit there and listen to all that shit? You're gonna get stopped like 3 lines in like "sir wtf are you doing and can you repeat the first the lines please? We didn't catch that."

Long story short regardless of how good the rap is or isn't, it's a dumb idea.

Ps: cool beat, you should stick to that.

Too late