Hey all, I was really baked and decided to pick up on a story I had started to write months ago, I have a rough draft of the first paragraph, and I have all the ideas behind it, just need to actually write it, anyways heres a preview, im mixing in some elements from both 1408 short story/film and the silent hill series, specifically mostly from silent hill 1 and silent hill 4. Anyways, I hope you enjoy it, give some feedback, im no stephen king, so please be gentle
oh and it might seem vague at some points, because I havent figure dout where they are, or where they are going, city names etc

Cheers

edit: Completely forgot, the main character is a stoner



I watched closely as smoke rose from the red burning ember and drifted weightless into the sky. For a brief
second forming a dense cloud with a striking resemblence to nebulae. I took a second inhale of my cigarette
and exhaled watching closely; a strong gust of wind dissappated the smoke quickly. I sighed deeply and stood to stretch;
What's taking her so long? I was waiting for my girlfriend Kali to arrive and tell me good news. For the past few months
my friends and I have been searching for an apartment to rent in another city; we had just put a deposit down on a
promising apartment near the downtown area. I sat back down and shifted my weight uncomfortably; inhaling
periodically the sharp pain in my back turned to a gentle numb sensation.

The next couple of paragraphs

Foot steps approached, I raised my head to see who was approaching. The couple holding hands were oddly
opposite. She was significantly shorter than he was and had nearly bleach blonde hair, walking confidently as if always the
center of attention where she went. Her boyfriend has been one of my best friends throughout highschool, Collin. A typical
stoner, always calm and mellow. "Hey Andrew, what's going on?"
"Nothing much, you guys are early." I replied, taking another drag before putting the cigarette out.
"Yeah, Jennifer was excited to see if we got it." Collin said, sitting on a chair while pulling another forward for Jennifer.
"Has Kali told you yet?" Jennifer asked, also taking a seat.
"Not yet, she should be getting here soon."
"You want to smoke a joint Andrew? I've got this really good weed off of Turv" Collin announced excitedly.
"Spark it up Collin." I replied while moving to a seat beside them.

Jennifer became even more bubbly at the proposition of smoking some pot. It almost made her feel badass just to
say she smoked; but we all knew twenty minutes later she was either laughing hysterically or asleep. A rookie by anyone's
standards; but it was always fun. Collin produced a joint from a pack of cigarettes he had in his backpack. From the size of it
there was at least a gram waiting to be inhaled by all of us, I hope Kali would be here in time to smoke some of it. Collin took
the first few drags, like a shockwave the smell of burning marijuana filled the air. I breathed deeply to take in as much of the
smell as possible, it was intoxicating. Collin passed it to Jennifer next, she took a fairly large hit and I could tell she was trying to
mimic her boyfriend in smoking abilities. She tried in vain to hold the hit in; but within a second she started coughing continuously
till she opened a pepsi from Collin's backpack. Finally the joint made it to me, I had taken bong hits several hours earlier so a
joint was just what I needed to clear my head. I inhaled deeply and felt the smoke started to fill my lungs, the smoke was smooth
and tasted like blueberry. By time I had taken a third toke I could feel the affects already flowing through my veins. "That's some
good shit eh?" Collin asked in between tokes of his own.

it good to me keep it up

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I like your set up, and mix of characters. The characters smoke (), dialogue isn't boring and kept my attention.... good stuff so far man, ill be checking back for more.

Thanks all, should be more comming today, Ive decided ill just post as I write stuff

This is the next two paragraphs, I think from now on, i'm going to post every four paragraphs


"No kidding, this must be some of that hydro stuff." Jennifer declared trying to sound like she knew what hydro meant.
"Turv usually has the best weed around." I replied producing another smoke from my pocket.

As I lit the cigarette more footsteps approached moving very swiftly. The joint was passed to me, taking another hit I
coughed; however not because the smoke had become too harsh. For a brief moment I was intoxicated not because of the potent
weed that surely was starting to take more affect. She had long brown hair; but today it was tied in a pony tail. I could only stare as
she walked smiling towards me, so beautiful was my only coherent thought. "Hey guys, I hope you saved some of that for me." She said,
with an anticipatory smile.
"Of course Kali, there is still plenty left." Collin replied, breaking my trance.
"Hey babe, how was dinner with the parents?" I asked.
"It was great" She said with a smile while taking a hit from the joint "We went to the Mandarin, everything was delicious."
"That's good, I'm glad you had a good time." I said with a dumb smile.

We all proceeded to smoke and have a great time, everyone buzzing excitedly about news of the apartment. By this point
Jennifer was giggling constantly, and laughing about anything that was the least bit funny. Collin had pulled out an Ipod and had started
listening to Metallica, periodically joining in on the conversation. Kali laughed along with Jennifer as they both declared their plans for the
upcoming move. I started to lay back into my chair, the indica was starting to hit as every muscle in my body started to relax. The
lesser staiva in the strain kept me excited for times to come. I felt that all too familiar feeling of being high on Cannabis, a euphoria
like nothing else.

I like it, i have a buddy who writes lots....but has yet to finish a single work. Anyway, thats some pretty compelling stuff you've got going there, keep it up!

Thanks Pot, it's comming along slowly, I only got another paragraph done yesterday, I got baked and forgot what I was doing and made food.

Heres the next dialogue, and another small paragraph


Breaking my blissful oblivion Kali said. "So, everyone must be dying to hear the news by now." Her face did not betray
the answer.
"Yes, finally it took forever!" Jennifer said with a huge grin.
"Sorry" she replied with a smile. "I wanted to build some suspense first." I straightened up in my chair, waiting intently.
"The superintendant called and told me the news." She said her smile faltering; my pulse quickened. "We got the apartment!"
For a moment I couldn't even comprehend her answer. "Why do you always do that!?" I asked, jokingly.
"I don't know, I just like the look on your face." She replied, obviously trying to be playful.

We both stared at each other for a minute, her eyes could petrify anyone at a distance. To be this close was quite frankly
nearly lethal; however I continued to look and put emphasis on every detail, specifically the iris. Surrounding the pupil was a faint
yellow, followed by the majority blue-gray. What I found most interesting was the very edge which was surrounded by a perfect
ring of the same faint yellow near pupil. Surely, my plain brown eyes were nothing by comparison. I sensed that I was being watched
and I noticed that everyone was looking at me. I looked at each of them in turn, and laughed.

Hey RIU, ive decided to write a little overview of the story, not even paragraph, like those things in printed on the back of the book to give you little hints as to what's going on, and where im going with this story


Four friends are ready for the next step in their lives, University. Spending a great deal of time searching
for apartments to rent near the University, they finally find one that seems perfect. The apartment is large, well-kept
and more than affordable. What could possibly go wrong? As they step into the apartment building none of them
realize the horrors they are about to face. As the door closes behind them it is unknown who will live to see the
outside world again, if any.

Awesome so far, cant wait to read what happens next! more more more!